Charity J Zupan as Gabby
Character Description
A first date for Gabby, it's been awhile since she has gone on a date, especially an online date.
Scene Description
A first date experience in modern times
Written by Jocelyn Pochman
Deborah Roby
ActressYou captured the uncertainty of a first internet date well! Your framing was good, we could see your face the whole time. I would suggest taking your time with the scene, letting your emotions vary a little more when you react to the things your reader says. He could slow down for you, too, to give you that time.
You could make the eye line for the waitress a little more pronounced, as well. Really picture her in your mind. I had a stage director tell me once "If you see it, we the audience will see it." That's even more true for film, the camera almost reads your thoughts.
Clint Hankinson
ActorGreat job Charity! Loved how you were connected to your scene partner. You listened and responded well! Loved your arc from start to finish. The technical stuff was great (frame, background, audio, etc).
Some thoughts - Might slow the pace down a little at the beginning. It felt a rushed for a date. I could tell you felt awkward when the other woman came into the scene, but would have liked to see that more pronounced and not as subtle.
Nice work!
Samuel Zupan
ActorGreat job! tell your silly little husband to make the video brighter next time and turn the audio up a little bit.
Was a little bit rushed, but pretty good pacing. and your arms were very stiff. but you had great eyelines and it was an interesting and different take on the character. GREAT WORK HUNBUN!
