Daesha Ivy as Claire Wilson
Character Description
Claire is a deeply resilient and self-sacrificing person, but she’s also burdened by years of suppressed frustration and unacknowledged sacrifices. Her sharpness and occasional bitterness mask a profound weariness and emotional vulnerability that come from carrying too much for too long. She has a strong sense of duty, especially toward family, which has led her to repeatedly put others’ needs ahead of her own, even at great personal cost. However, the weight of these sacrifices has left her feeling stuck, invisible, and resentful.
Scene Description
Claire has spent her entire adult life taking care of her free-spirit younger brother, bailing him out every time his new ventures fail. Tonight, she is over it and confronts him.
Written by Renee Michaels
Wendy Cyr
ActressDaesha,
Thank you for memorizing the lines so well. You really had the lines down if you'd just trusted yourself to live in the moment. Where you can improve is mainly your eye control again. Make sure you know where you are looking when and why. Your brother moved from the camera (which is not usually where you want him, but it was a choice) to beside it - you have to choose one or the other. Also be careful of your hands, your use of props and slapping your legs when frustrated. Maybe have a table with your props just off camera. Well done on frustration levels & the ups and downs.
Wendy
Mark Miertschin
ActorGood job! I loved the pan toss. I would have left it the first time or only throw it the second time. Making it a little less about the pan and more about the sermon to your brother. The last line needs to be more emotional weighty. You've been carrying him for a long time and now your releasing it or realizing it with the statement "I haven't been ok for a long time."
JD Leach
ActorHi Daesha! You're acting was excellent- response time and emotional response was great. Filming in vertical mode was a little distracting- You really did great in this - being able to watch in landscape mode would have helped tremendously from a viewer perspective. Keep rocking it out there!
Les Best
ActorDaesha,
The frustration is clear in your body language, your face, and your voice. Good job. I liked that you had business to use your hands during the reading. It helped. A couple of ideas: Find your point where you're placing your scene partner and be consistent. You used three different spots and it was distracting. The piece did not have an arc. You tossed the pan down a couple of times, but it didn't seem real. There was no climax to the scene. A lot of looking down, too much using the same hand gestures, and too much shaking the head. Your talent is obvious, just needed more prep.
Susan Willis
ActressAlways film in landscape mode (sideways) instead of portrait mode. we only need to see from about chest up so we can see any emotion happening in the face. With this wide shot I could see the "fake scrubbing" and it wasn't believable. Throwing the pan wasn't effective and the noise is distracting which doesn't help the scene build. I could see you struggling with the lines. Be sure you are fully prepared before you tape so you don't send in a tape with obvious struggles. Get grounded with the words and understand WHY you are saying them, it will help with memorization
Clint Hankinson
ActorNice work Daedalus! I could tell you were fed up with your brother.
I’d love to see you feeling more of what you were saying. It wasn’t as believable as it could be. Your anger and resentment have been building for years and this is the moment when they come bursting out. You’ve exchanged a normal life with relationships and promotions for a lazy ungrateful brother. How does that really make you feel?
On a technical note, shoot the scene horizontally and crop top of head to mid chest so we can see your eyes better.
Nice job!
