David Stiver as Charles Riley Doogan
Character Description
Charlie Doogan is a deeply unhinged individual with a warped sense of reality. His erratic behavior and delusional rants reveals a mind consumed by paranoia, violence, and a twisted vision of the world. He is inspired by Charles Manson.
Scene Description
A deranged serial killer ramblingly reveals the chaos of their fragmented, disturbed psyche, that blurs reality and delusion.
Written by Jason Walter Vaile
Clint Hankinson
ActorGreat job David! Loved the calm approach. Great eyeline.
A few thoughts to consider - might tighten your shot to upper or mid chest to very top of head so we can see your eyes better. I'd love to see more of what you were thinking come through your eyes. Are you Jesus, the Savior of the world? How does that make you feel? How does being a nobody/Hobo make you feel? Think more ups and downs would add interest to the monologue. Just my 2 cents! Nice work!
Susan Willis
ActressNice work, I'd love to see you try this at a faster pace. This character seems to be quite unhinged. even though the slow methodical delivery is effective a faster pace could lean into even more craziness and take this role to a new level. I know in self tapes we have to modify for "self tape" space. It's totally acceptable to really used your space - side-to-side - front-to-back and really push the boundaries. This character is begging to disturb the audience.
Robin Bjerke
Actress | Writer | FilmmakerDavid, this was really engaging. You let your presence fill the moments by not rushing through this. I would consider letting yourself take in the agent and consider your opponent before speaking, Also, at the end, you might explore if the lines about being a "nothing" is a turn for the character. The sides specify that he "darkens" at this point, so what is that about? Was he a hobo treated like a nothing, was he abused by one? Perhaps that line is the key to why he is the way he is, and giving it some weight will give you a payoff with the outburst at the end. Really well done.
Jarod O'Flaherty
FilmmakerGreat work with your mouth throughout. The laughs and random grins really worked. The laugh after BOOM! was the best. The performance got creepier as it went along (the goal!), but the first 10-15 seconds seemed a bit too grounded and those first few seconds are critical in casting. Perhaps starting with a whisper and zero eye contact would have helped with the intro section? But by the end you were nailing it!
