David Ray Olivas as Cosmo
Character Description
Cosmo is your classic oddball detective, as kooky as Ace Ventura, as inept as Inspector Clouseau, but with his own brand of crazy. His social graces are lacking, he’s a magnet for especially unattractive women, and he listens to Weird Al in his car (in fact, he is a Weird Al junkie). His prominent quirk is that he struggles with the word “foresight,” and is always confusing it with similar words such as “foreplay,” “foreskin,” and “forecast.” This makes for some awkward and often hilarious slip-ups.
Scene Description
This snippet was taken from an idea for an absurdist comedy.
Cosmo Mallet, oddball and clumsy wisecracker, is paired with the highly polished, straight-laced Stuart Jepsen. Together, they must catch a serial killer who targets the elderly. The ruckus at the department store is centered around the murder of an elderly night watchman, the latest victim of the elusive antagonist. In the absurd world of the story, the police department is selling tickets to shoppers and allowing them to see the crime scene, which is why there’s so many people hanging around when Cosmo and Stuart show up.
Written by Patrick Bradford
Rachael Brown
ActressAnother good tape cosmo.
I know the camera is fixed and this is only a frame of you... but I wish I could've seen the whole scene (lol) .
I liked the choice to make Cosmo, feel more serious as it added to the comedic nature for me. Great look.
Clint Hankinson
ActorNice work David! Loved your characterization of the bumbling detective. It was more of a straight "Naked Gun" personality, rather than a clownish "Pet Detective."
You might adjust your frame to just above your head and mid-chest or waist. I was a little confused by your eyelines. When you spoke to the woman, it looked like she was either very tall, or you were below her kneeling. If you kept all of your eyelines 6-12" from the camera, we could see your eyes better and still understand where everyone is in the scene.
Just my 2 cents. Great job!
Joanie Geiger
ActressNice work! I especially enjoyed how your character took himself seriously without acting silly. The humor was that he didn't know he was ridiculous. Your lighting and sound are great. Technical notes: frame from top of head to mid-chest or just below the shoulders depending on the scene. Casting wants to see your eyes. They are the window through which the audience sees what the character experiences. When looking at something on the ground, you can cheat your eyeline so that the camera sees your eyes. Same with looking around. Slight adjustments left to right look bigger in a closeup.
